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what are you living for? |
Jul 27 2008, 11:25 AM
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empty spaces full of hatred g-d is absent from all places (is God (or g-d or however) absent from these places?) what is it that we are living for?(what are we living for?) rays of sunshine boughs of violates (violets?) little things that make this place mine(things that make this mine:) picking up this bottle on the ground (a bottle on the ground.) people starving alone and friendless who could why we're all striving everything is up to us we cannot sit it's too much for me to handle providing for so much need. how can it be accomplished if it's only coming from me? why does it seem personal responsibility is to rid the world of imperfection? yet if youbut only do your part your part will make a difference. everyone is so divided how can unification occur? the cause seems hopeless, and efforts for "right" just error. do a little where you can lead all your friends by example influence what is in your own sphere you're reward will be quite ample. rise up to meet the challenge and listen to the bas kol calling live solely by example if there's nothing else to be doing. I'm not sure I can finish it. sounds complete to me. i'm sure you'll want to edit, play, tighten it up, slay the cliches, etc. -------------------- |
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Jul 28 2008, 09:36 AM
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for the record: i was contacted and asked to review this piece. i don't want anyone to think that i would presumptuously pull a post off the main forum and alter it.
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