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what are you living for?
Ahavati
post Jul 27 2008, 11:25 AM
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QUOTE (outspoken @ Jul 27 2008, 10:33 AM) *
empty spaces
full of hatred
g-d is absent from all places (is God (or g-d or however) absent from these places?)
what is it that we are living for?(what are we living for?)
rays of sunshine
boughs of violates (violets?)
little things that make this place mine(things that make this mine:)
picking up this bottle on the ground (a bottle on the ground.)

people starving
alone and friendless
who could ever look upon this
why is it that we are we just sitting here?

we're all striving
for toward perfection
everything is up to us now
we cannot sit and simply let leave it be

it's too much for me to handle
providing for so much need.
how can it be accomplished
if it's only coming from me?

why does it seem personal responsibility
is to rid the world of imperfection?
yet if youbut only do your part
your part will make a difference.

everyone is so divided
how can unification occur?
the cause seems hopeless,
and efforts for "right" just error.

do a little where you can
lead all your friends by example
influence what is in your own sphere
you're reward will be quite ample.

rise up to meet the challenge
and listen to the bas kol calling
live solely by example
if there's nothing else to be doing.

I'm not sure I can finish it. sad.gif its not that good either. just struck me a bit. I haven't been able to write lately. sad.gif


sounds complete to me. i'm sure you'll want to edit, play, tighten it up, slay the cliches, etc.


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post Jul 28 2008, 09:36 AM
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for the record: i was contacted and asked to review this piece. i don't want anyone to think that i would presumptuously pull a post off the main forum and alter it.


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